I haven’t quite finished this story. But it really wowed them at Clarion. The potential it has…
[Need a killer opening line.]
[Really vivid setting details. (Don’t forget the character … quirky!)]
[Have to research hard sci-fi sciency stuff. Make people think i’m smart.]
[Something awesome happens!]
[Try fail cycle. (Thematic allusions to feminist critique of capitalism?)]
[Depressing fatalistic ending. (Kill the baby?)]
Honestly, I thought it was by far your best work. *G*
Genius = Me
I dunno, Gra. I mean, it's as good as I remember — but rereading, now, I think maybe you could have done more with the whole Theme thing.
Thanks, Neil. I'm ready to take it to the next level.
I still say the story needs a mythological allusion to really resonate.
Maybe something about the Spurs?